This is the beginning of a short story I am writing. I wrote this beginning about a month ago, and upon reading it recently, disovered that it wasn't too bad. Since I haven't posted for a while, I thought I would share.
When I am done writing it, I am not going to try to publish it or anything, because I don't think I am experienced enough to try to give this effect (you'll see what I mean when you read it.) However, it is good practice for when I am older.
Well, here it is...
I am reluctant to believe what has just happened to me, but the cold, stark facts convince me of the awful truth. My senses, overwhelmed from absorbing that heart-breaking moment, are now numb with shock, paralyzed in horror. A wave of sadness washes over me, forcing tears down my cheeks. It is hard to imagine that, only a minute ago, I was experiencing the greatest joy of my life. Is it possible that happiness, which now seems many miles distant, was really that recent?
The former glory of this day feels so unfamiliar, yet I can still recall the dream-like events of earlier.
Keep in mind that I haven't edited this yet. I can definitely see some changes that could be made, especially in sentence length and structure.
-Hyacinth
WOW!!! You are awesome at writing!!!! You are soooo good at describing and using a huge variety of vocabulary. I am jealous!! Is this the story you wanted to show Grayson or not?
ReplyDeleteNo!!! I would never post that!!
ReplyDeleteo my gosh i seriosly almost started crying when i read it!!!! u r an amazing writer!!!!
ReplyDeleteYeah, I didn't think you would, but just wanted to make sure :)
ReplyDeleteWow even I cant write like that and my dad is a writer!
ReplyDeleteReally? What does he write?
ReplyDeleteyour dads a writer???? i didnt know that!!!!
ReplyDeleteducky ur dad is a writter?!?!? That is soo cool! Has he written any books?? And Hyacinth.. THAT IS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!! I THOUGHT I WAS READING A REAL PUBLISHED BOOK!! YOU MUST GET IT PUBLISHED!!! I FOR ONE WOULD BUY IT!!!!! sooooo pretty!
ReplyDeleteThank you, maybe I will after all. :) I don't know how I could do it, though, because it is about a grown-up, so I don't know if children's writing magazines would accept it. I could try to submit it to an adult magazine, but then I would have to be competing with uldult writers who have had at least 20 years of living to learn, whereasI only have 14. :(
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